All right. I was soooo ready to call the final the final...
My dear editor/coach/friend had different ideas. Still very happy with meter and verse - rhymes all work well...
She's not happy with the ending.... Says it needs more punch.....
Back to the drawing board, dear friends. A change to one line or one word can take hours to 'fix' for the rest of the piece. I liked the ending - but I could sense a bit of unease whenever I re-read it.
I shall endure.... She's right, of course. *g*
The difference between the right word and the almost right word is the difference between lightning and a lightning bug. ~Mark Twain
ReplyDeleteWOW - that is a great quote. And so confoundedly correct.
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